Tuesday, April 15, 2008

GoodDay(3)

The Sun Is So Yellow
People Keep Telling Me Hello
As It Shine In my Face
He Say Hey My Name Is Ace


Do You Want To Go On A Date
Like Superman With My Fate
Have A Good Time And Eat Some Cake
Why We Stare Into The Lake
Just Dont Be Late


4 comments:

G. Latman said...

This poem should contain rhyming couplets, which means you must have an even number of lines. You have 9. Also, you were asked for 2 lines with similes, but I only see 1.

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G. Latman said...

You only have 4 out of the 5 poems required. What's up with that?